I'm happy with my feedback I got from the Pitch. As it solved the problem I had with my story. That I was adding more things into the story without considering that it might be confusing for the audience aged between 12-14 to understand it. After talking with Phil and Jordan about my idea, I got a clear image of what I will be planning to do.
All in all, the tribal idea will continue to be, the only other thing that needs refining my story/script and some parts of my environment.